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The Webcomic Overlook #230: Ava’s Demon

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It’s getting to be a familiar site these days to see animators flexing their creative juices in webcomics. Just about 5 years ago, it seemed like a novelty when Chris Sanders, animation director of Disney’s Lilo & Stitch, brought his verve to the little electrical screen with Kiskaloo. An actual animator! Deigning to illustrate webcomic! How about that! Man, webcomics aren’t just for bored college liberal art students with a poor grasp of MSPaint anymore!

Nowadays, it’s a little more commonplace. Katie Rice, the winner of this year’s Strip Search, to point out one of the most prominent examples, is herself an animator. I suppose it makes sense. As an animator, I’m thinking that most of the time you’re shackled to someone else’s brilliant vision… like, say, Madagascar 3: Europe’s Most Wanted. Sure, there’s some creative leeway there. Maybe suggestions on the character design. Or ideas on fun little background elements. Or animating the letters “S-E-X” in the clouds near Aladdin and Jasmine.

I, too, wanted to be an animator once.  Inspired by the Disney Renaissance of the early 90’s, I even once bought a book about how to break into the biz.  If these animators were anything like I was, I’m guessing a lot got into the field because they wanted to tell stories. Their stories. There’s a creative force gnawing inside, waiting for the day when it can be finally unleashed on the world. Something like … a crazed little demon.

Speaking of crazed little demons, that’s sort of the premise for Ava’s Demon. The webcomic was created by Michelle Czajkowski, who, as I understand it, is an animator at Dreamworks.

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There’s one thing you can guarantee when there’s an animator at the helm: you’re going to get some damn good art. Ms. Czajkowski dies not disappoint.  Her character designs are a little familiar, bearing traces of the Dreamworks house style.  One of the perks of having an animator draw a webcomic is that there’s strong attention to illustrating movement.  Parts of Ava’s Demon resemble storyboards, with subsequent panels supplying the language of action. Ms. Czajkowski decided to have one page represent one panel.  The reading experience, then, is a breezy one.  I tend to linger on a page for only a few seconds, and then it’s a click to the next.  It’s definitely a much different experience than reading a standard webcomic.

(Incidentally, Ava’s Demon had a very successful Kickstarter to fund the print edition.  Congratulations are in order for Ms. Czajkowski.  However, I do wonder if this comic successfully translates on paper.  No doubt the art would still be pretty.  The pacing, though, would be something different.)

Ms. Czajkowski’s animation experience shines through in other ways.  There are points in the comic that are animated a set to music. Yup, it’s the dreaded motion comic. Now, I’ve been pretty down on motion comics before. However, I actually kinda like the ones in Ava’s Demon. Maybe it’s because these videos are well drawn and incorporate several scenes without overstaying its welcome? In any case, these videos are optional. The first time I read through Ava’s Demon, it was on my iPhone, a device that’s perfect for the single panel programs but is strongly averse to any video-embedding program not named Quicktime nor Youtube. I had to skip the Vimeo videos. While the scenes of Ava rocketing off are indeed well done, they’re not necessary to understanding the story.

The single panel format and the inclusion of video and music reminds me a lot of Homestuck, by the way. There’s even similarities in the way the story is told in the way it follows around a huge cast of characters as they go about on their own adventures that are tied clandestinely to the central story. Crap, one of the characters has candy-like horns. Is Ms. Czajkowski a Hussie fan? At least at no point did I have to put up with an absurdly long and unreadable chatlog.

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Ava’s Demon features some lovely color palettes. It’s probably the comic’s strongest defining feature. Palettes are typically simple. There’s usually varying shades of one or two colors, which create the illusion of three-dimensional depth while illuminating the characters like neon lights. It starts off with the website. You know how most sites use either white or black as a background. Ava’s Demon bucks the trend by featuring a deep shade of red. (“#4d0a00” for you color hipsters.) The color bleeds around the edges of the comic proper. It has the interesting effect of making the panel pop off the screen. An elven looking character named Gil is primarily rendered in sky blue. Another girl, Maggie, is awash in bright green and orange. Pretty much all the characters a walking bug zappers, and we are the poor moth caught in the thrall of bright shiny objects.

Pretty much the only character who seems to blend in with our maroon red background is our title character, Ava. Also, to a lesser degree, Wrathia, the demon who live inside her. At least Wrathia usually pulsates a fiery hot orange, threatening to blind the reader with her tangerine heat. Ava is often the same shade as the page itself. It occurs to me that this is probably intentional. Ava is a sad, shrinking violet. With a demon possessing her, she often exhibits embarrassing outbursts similar to Tourette’s. (Early on, she’s expelled from school and is fated to be in a Special Needs program.) Blending into the background? It’s totally a character trait.

But back to the colors. There’s another sequence that I like where the color palette is front and center. There’s a sequence when Gil shows Maggie a space Bible. It’s a little like an iPad, and a little like those glowing blue screens at the marketplace kiosks in the Mass Effect games. Czajkowski cheekily animates these panels to wiggle and flicker, a reminder that while there’s some pretty nice tech in the future, it’s not all perfect. However, my eyes were drawn on how the bright blue screen paired nicely against the red background. The color combination, as well as a brief moment that eliminates the panel borders (which, on other panels, resemble a torn out page), and, if I can be pretentious for a second, brings about a unity of form.

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So yeah, I’m a pretty big fan of the art. So what about the story?

… meh.

It’s not that I hate it per se. It’s got the seeds of some sort of epic space opera with demons and robots and vengeance and Goth Lolita snipers for some reason. Why it’s everything a little boy could ever want … and more! Unfortunately, it call boils down to a very common complaint that I wish I didn’t have to make: I just did not care about the characters at all.

I think we’re supposed to sympathize with Ava. Why wouldn’t we? She’s had a pretty terrible life. The demon, Wrathia, and a mad plan to be reincarnated into a powerful warrior so she could defeat Titan, who, in this comic, is sorta God.  (Also, if one of the background images is to be trusted, Titan is apparently an EVA.)  Instead, she ends up in the body of Ava. It turns out it was a really stupid plan. That’s OK, I suppose, since at this point Wrathia is more of a comic relief character than an actual threat. She’s not even the main character in this comic, despite it being named after her.

So Ava’s had a whole life of being shunned because people just didn’t understand what she’s been going though.  It’s pretty much an allegory for the teenage years.  She should be easy to sympathize with.  And yet, I actually find it had to root for her. Oh, I don’t hate her.  She’s likable enough, in a Mickey Mouse sorta way.  But when Ava’s saying things like, “I used to dream about what it would be like if I could make friends… fall in love… what it would be like to enjoy waking up,”  I’m pulling the same grumpy face that Wrathia’s got in that same scene.  I don’t know, maybe it’s because I’m a cynical old fart now.  Or maybe it’s because Ava comes off as a total doormat who probably could’ve subdued a total doofus like Wrathia a long time ago if she had even an ounce of defiance.  Or maybe she’s a little whiny.  It makes it very hard for me to care if she ever gets her desire for “a new life.

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As for the other characters… they’re pretty.  That’s all they have going for them.  At the beginning of the story, Ava is essentially a stowaway on a ship with two other characters.  One is Maggie, who is instantly abrasive.  The other is a stuttering dude who apparently has ulterior motive that he’s told no one about, including the reader.  Neither gives us any reason to like them.  When Gil shows up, you sorta expect the blue pretty boy to be someone to care about.  Yet, he just comes across as a loopy hippie weirdo.  Granted, that’s a little more likable than the scheming green-haired girl with plant powers, but he’s too dense to be truly likable.

It’s not necessary for all characters to be cookie-cutter hero types, but there has to be some reader investment into seeing a character get closer to fulfilling his or her agenda.  It’s what hooks you into seeing a story to the end.  Ava’s Demon is an example of a webcomic I really wanted to love based on the art alone, but in the end felt ambivalent and let down because the characters didn’t interest me at all.

Rating: 3 stars (out of 5)

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About El Santo

Somehow ended up reading and reviewing almost 300 different webcomics. Life is funny, huh? Despite owning two masks, is not actually a luchador.

Posted on August 10, 2013, in 3 Stars, adventure webcomic, sci-fi webcomic, The Webcomic Overlook, WCO Big Review, webcomics. Bookmark the permalink. 27 Comments.

  1. Hmm, I thought the S-E-X letters were in The Lion King. Bad research, El Santo, bad research.

    About Ava’s Demon: I surprisingly had a very comfortbale reading experience. The “One panel- one page” concept got me hooked after a few pages. I tend to read some webcomics swiftly and I don’t really focus on singly panels. My eyes automatically go to the next panel. But in Ava’s Demon I give myself much more time to pay attention to the drawings (of course because it’s gorgeous, too).

    But yeah, I kinda agree with you about the characters. I hardly feel any sympathy for most of the cast. But I think the webcomic needs more time to build them out. I’m really glad that Ms Czajkowski has now the chance to work on Ava’s Demon full time since she successfully kickstarted her campaign.

  2. To be honest, I’m mostly reading this for the art.

  3. How far along are you in Homestuck? How close are you to actually reviewing it?

    • Oh, and the way you describe this makes it sound like Dresden Codak, a comic everyone adores for the art despite the story being lacking. (Note: I only read through the Hob storyline and may have been influenced by John Solomon calling Kim a Mary Sue.)

      • The earlier one-shot strips’re a vastly different beast from the Hob storyline. As someone who was a fan of Dresden Codak, I enjoyed the weird surrealism and silly absurdism in those earlier comics more than I did the Hob storyline, even if the latter had some pretty moments.

        I guess what I’m saying is that by only reading the Hob storyline you didn’t really get the full gist of the appeal Dresden Codak had to people before it tried going all dramatic. I’d still go back to those earlier strips, but I wouldn’t bother going back to the Hob comics (other than perhaps the ones with the time travelers having silly misconceptions about the modern age).

        • I found the pre-Hob comics to be incomprehensible, but I guess they’re the sort of thing the nerdy webcomic crowd, the sort of people who like xkcd, would lap up.

          • For me, it’s more that I”m a fan of surrealism. I actually lost interest in Xkcd (my favorites were the more whimsical earlier strips), and one of the other webcomics I enjoy reading has literally nonsensical dialogue and takes place in a dream world filled with absurdity. Combine that surrealism with the occasional science joke I do appreciate, and you get why I liked DC. I also liked A Lesson Is Learned but the Damage Is Irreversible (which seems to my eyes like an obvious influence on DC but is probably more accessible), but it likely was also killed by its own rich art. Having read your review, your reaction’s entirely understandable. This kind of webcomic isn’t for everyone and I mean that in a genuine “everyone has their own tastes” way, not a snobby “you can’t appreciate my superior taste” way.

            Kim is a meh character that could’ve easily been exchanged with someone else experiencing those weird adventures (like a more plain looking girl, a talking cat, whatever) with relatively little impact. I enjoyed her adventures, but for the most part I don’t really care about her as a character. To me she exists simply because someone has to go on those adventures.

            Regarding art quality, I think it enhances the comic when it’s used well. Story’s probably more important in some regards, yes, but a marriage of the two can be really good. The now completed Digger webcomic is a good example of this; someone genuinely highly skilled at art (as in she makes her living from professional art) drew her own webcomic with a simplified version of her own style that nevertheless was quite gorgeous (and it followed its update schedule almost religiously). Combined with snappy writing, it was quite an enjoyable experience. Even Order of the Stick actually uses its own minimalistic style quite well, having some rather complicated scenes like battles with hundreds of combatants and other panels with a lot going on in them.

        • Actually, you might want to read my Dresden Codak review. One of my biggest problems with the Hob storyline was simply that the incomprehensibility of the early strips meant that trying to do an actual, continuing, coherent storyline that way was a bad idea to begin with.

    • Hmmm… hopefully I’ll get around to doing a review of Homestuck sometime this month.

  4. Very good review. Lately I’ve been describing Ava’s Devon as the ‘anti-Hanna-Is-Not-A-Boy’s-Name’ because, though I like ‘Hanna’, I feel like they have really similar-but-opposite writing flaws. In Hanna all of the characters seem to like and trust each other way too quickly, and while that strikes me as questionable writing, it still kind of endears me to the characters in Hanna. In ‘Ava’s Demon’, all the characters want to kill each at the drop of a hat, and 90% of the time I don’t get the reasoning why. When the motives are explained, it usually comes off as childish (in fact, I’d argue that a lot of the dialogue in Ava’s Demon is written as if the characters are children). It’s a very pretty comic, but…

  5. Been giving it a read, (some 300+ panels into it so far,) and it’s definitely not bad, but I find myself getting put off by a number of things in the writing and pacing. The story moves quickly — like, waaay quickly for the first couple chapters. I get so little introduction to the characters, the world Ava was used to, and how troubled her life is because of Wrathia, I find myself just raising an eyebrow when things start turning “Titan A.E.” and the planet blows up. It happens so quickly that I seriously thought when I clicked “Start Reading” it dropped me off a ways in, and NOT at the beginning. I would have liked to have seen more situations at the start where Wrathia is trying to talk to/pester/persuade/influence Ava, (and her frustrating failure at doing so,) as well as getting a more fleshed out introduction to Maggie and Odin.

    I find myself having to take a LOT at face value with the characters simply because they’re are telling me what I should know versus seeing it through actions. I know Ava’s a troubled child (thanks to Wrathia) who apparently always wanted friends and a normal life — BECAUSE she tells me. I know Maggie used to be friends with Ava and now hates her — BECAUSE Maggie tells me. And what’s with all the automatic hatred and contempt everyone in this story has for each other except Gil? I’ve been given so little context to believe that these people find each other so incredibly insufferable to be around — OTHER than the fact I’m told so. Why is Maggie so pissed at Odin for saving her ass and getting her off the planet that she would’ve surely died on? Ava, too, her first reaction on the ship is also to smack Odin with a wrench?? [I’m sure Maggie has a soul of one of Wrathia’s warriors or something that she already made a pact with long ago, hence the plant powers and the line where she says “I know I’ll survive the crash.” — but still, that seems strangely convenient that ava, maggie, and gil all have one and are around each other so early in the story. Small universe, eh?]

    And then the pace of the plot seems to slow down quite a bit compared to those first three. In the first three, Ava goes from being a troubled student, to being expelled, to being attacked by robots, to her planet being blown up, to stowing away on a ship, to crash landing on a planet, GETTING KILLED, making a pact with Wrathia, and coming back to life. The next three chapters? Ava’s in the bathroom while we get a much much more detailed look at Gil’s backstory than we got for Ava. (Which supports El Santo’s claim at this stage that Ava doesn’t seem much like the main character at the moment.)

    There’s obviously a lot more to the story and these first 6-7 chapters are only the surface of what Czajkowski has planned, (though I really hope it won’t continue to be explained entirely through character dialogue.) Still, I will continue to read this to see if these jarring criticisms somehow smooth out as the plot goes on. You might want to revisit this one as well in a year or two, Santo, see if it improves. (I hope it does!)

    • Forgot to also mention that I didn’t fully buy the sequence where Wrathia suddenly changes tune at the last second to accept the pact with Ava. We’re told very expositionally that Ava is a weak creature and Wrathia has LONGED for her death so she could move on to something perhaps stronger. Both Ava and Wrathia change their tune so swiftly in this scene, I again had to take what was happening simply at face value for the sake of plot progression. I can assume Wrathia probably didn’t want to waste more time (it’s already been 15 years afterall) bound to another host until maturity — but still.

      Again, maybe we’ll understand these relationships more as it goes on.

      • Well, Wrathia’s plot is a bit silly in the first place, first taking threats at face value without even considering of investigating what kind of enemy her and her husband’s empire is facing and instead of trying to put up even the slightest form of resistance to test the mettle of the invaders, she rather cooks up a potion which makes it able for her to potentially possess an even more powerful being to fight against the perceivedly impossibly powerful adversary.

        Now because the whole thing is based on random chance, odds are that shes going to end up in a vastly inferior body, which is why her plan was kinda stupid to begin with. And even if she’d actually end up in a body of some newborn god or something, what would a singular powerful person achieve than what her earlier already powerful form and an entire empire behind it could not?

        The art is really great to look at but yeah, she needs to get a second writer to this project, to read her drafts and “slap her in the head” to make the plot more comprehensive and sensical.

        • I did think that while her backstory was explained. Something along the lines of “Don’t you feel just the littlest bit silly explaining this horrible plan to someone you despise?” But if I understand the mechanics of the story correctly, it’s not just that Wrathia wanted to inhabit a stronger being, it’s the whole pact thing that combines both her and her host’s abilities into one or something. (Their combination being more powerful together than either Ava or Wrathia alone.) It’s still really convoluted, though. “Surrendering to Titan doesn’t secure our survival. So let’s just say we’ve already lost and start on our revenge early.”

  6. Counterpoint: The characters in Ava’s Demon are cold and distant, reflective of how Ava perceives the world around her. Ava is not like someone with Tourette’s but someone with Multiple Personality Disorder or Bipolar Disorder who is trying to establish who she really is amidst the turmoil inside her.. It is only upon her certain death that she can finally separate and confront that which she does not believe to be herself. Thus I find Ava to be a realatable character as someone who constantly has to resist one’s own negative thoughts. Ava’s Demon is a very frightening universe where characters have learned to distance themselves from others. I think the artist has done an excellent job establishing how none of the characters can act in good faith. Ava’s Demon is a dark comic, no doubt, but the characters are difficult with each other for good reason. Sure they aren’t eternally happy and chlildishly simplistic like those of the last two 5-star reviews, but I don’t think a cast of mean or unhappy souls is necessarily bad if it fits the fictional context around them, which in this case I think it does.

    • Some good points, but honestly more could’ve been done with this, especially establishing this. Stuff like focusing a little more on the culture of competition Titan apparently cultivates in his education facilities and how it alienates the students from each other. Not to mention all the stuff fox-orion mentions in the comment above as being told rather than showed. In short, we didn’t really get enough to get into the characters’ heads before getting flung headfirst into the plot.

      • I do agree that there are certain staging problems. Part of it is a big flaw in the artwork: the artist, despite being an animator, prefers to draw undertures or bland facial expressions that don’t give the audience a lot of detail. If you want to see something cringe-worthy, check out her Kickstarter and see the “drawing rewards” and notice that they all have that same half-smile. I disagree that Chapter 3 was a mistake in storytelling. The dramatic visual statement I think propels the backstory (though maybe it would have been enhanced had our protagonist not been in mortal peril for pretty much the entire comic thus far?). No doubt Chapter 4 is a not-so-keen way at getting some exposition. The artist is really in a bind in this one with a main character that is so limited (she can’t really do anything because of her disability). I probably would have told the backstory in a piece-by-piece fashion through the character’s conversation with actual plot going on rather than a big lump of back-in-time. Two flashbacks that close together was a bad idea.

        So I don’t think everybody here is wrong… just that I like these unlikable characters. Also I like the dialog more than others, but maybe that’s because I’m comparing it to the other Shilled Webcomics (I read them all, and this one was one of the few that didn’t try to stuff as many words on a page as possible). I also think the fictional universe, dark and tough as it may be, is one of the better ones I’ve seen. And I think the comic has a lot of depth, particularly that it is relatable to those with social anxieties. In summary, I agree with a vast amount of the criticism here but I think the good far exceeds the bad.

    • Sure they aren’t eternally happy and chlildishly simplistic like those of the last two 5-star reviews, but I don’t think a cast of mean or unhappy souls is necessarily bad if it fits the fictional context around them, which in this case I think it does.

      The last 5-star review was for Oyster War. In that, the main character is an irascible former Confederate soldier. The crew includes a guy who’s a traitor and a superstitious sailor that the captain sneers at despite visual proof that magic is real. I don’t know if I’d describe any of them as eternally happy or childishly simplistic. I think that the character dynamics at play in Oyster War are far more complex than in Ava’s Demon.

      (Wuffle, on the other hand…. yes, you would be correct. But that’s a comic for kids and should be judged accordingly.)

      • I mixed up the order of your reviews: the one I was thinking of was Ellie on Planet X. My apologies.

        I was thinking about which 5-star comic character best resembles Ava, and I guess it would be Pup. Pup also seemed trapped and conflicted with himself and thus was unable to do really anything other than overthink things. Though Pup (the comic) didn’t take itself so seriously, which I guess is a downfall of Ava’s Demon. I didn’t think Pup was whiny but rather I felt sad for him because he has depression and I feel a similar bond with Ava who has problems that nobody around her can understand.

        (It should be noted that, despite my angered icon, my remarks are more just out of an urge to talk than anything else. As someone who’s read every review since the beginning, this is the first time I’ve felt compelled enough to respond.)

        (Also, a complete sidenote: I frequently compare you to Roger Ebert as you both have similar writing styles: a focus on nailing down all the plot points followed by a discussion on how the comic effected you. You, like him, have a very populist perspective, an eclectic taste buoyed by an obsession with the medium. And you are both all about the characters and a disinterest in symbolism or hidden meanings. Which is why I guess it is unsurprising that the movie review I disagree with Ebert the most–Brazil–is similar in its highly-stylized futuristic dystopia with unlikable characters and a confusing, jarring narrative. Maybe I just have a soft spot for those sort of things.)

        • No problem! Apologies if I came off as confrontational. I was more confused than anything.

          Anyway, thanks for reading through my site and checking out my reviews! Also, I’m quite flattered by the Ebert comparison. I used to plow through his old reviews long before I even started blogging about. (I think if you look at my search history when I was in college, the Sun-Times archives will probably be the one that shows up the most.) I even have a collection of his negative movie reviews (“I Hated, Hated, Hated This Movie”), and I love how meticulous he is when picking apart things he didn’t like. I don’t agree with all his writing either (“Starship Troopers”, a fave of mine, is in the book), but I do like how he lays out his reasons for the reader to decide if they agree with him or not.

          Thanks for delurking and commenting. Despite my somewhat rude response, I found plenty to like in your comment. Back when I was starting this site, I had a dream that one day there would be a vibrant community that would pop up to discuss webcomics with passion and intensity.

          … it’s getting there. 🙂

  7. I really like this comic, but reading through the archive for the first time I did have some quibbles with the writing. I personally like the characters, even if they’re very prickly. There are some character relationships that definitely need to be fleshed out, but I’m thinking we’ll learn about them in due time–there’s gotta be some sort of history or incident that would make Maggie hate Odin so much. I think if we had gotten all the back story of these characters’ childhoods right at the beginning, it might have slowed down the beginning hook. It’s not wise to throw too much exposition or spend most of the comic in flashbacks in the earliest stages of the story. It’d be nice to see some though so hopefully they’ll come later.

    Writing-wise my main problems were the pacing and some awkward dialogue. Gil’s dialogue when he was first introduced was too stilted, even for his character. In the end, I still find the characters and world compelling. I really look forward to each update and hope to see some of the writing issues smooth out as the story develops.

    • It’s not necessarily that we would’ve needed to see these characters backstories at the very beginning to see why they feel toward each other as they do — but rather, we just to SEE and FEEL their problems with each other as they already exist. As it is, the characters explain how they feel toward each other at just about every chance they get, rather than letting us see and experience those feelings through action.

      Red Letter Media’s review of Star Wars Episode II comes to mind. Around 4:35 into the first review video, Plinkett sums up this bit about Anakin and Obi-Wan standing in an elevator going up to see Padme:
      “So at the beginning, we’re given 60 seconds in an elevator to establish that Anakin and Obi-Wan are friends. And please notice that this is not accomplished by how they act as friends, but rather it’s by them recounting things that happened in the past. Things we never see. We don’t really see or feel characters connections with each other, we have to be told about them (for us to believe them.)”
      I feel that based on what I’ve seen so far, Ava’s Demon could continue falling into this same fatal criticism.

      Gil recalling his backstory in a more visually “flashbacky” kind of way is a step in the right direction, though. We see why he values his relationship with Nevy since she’s helped him quite handily in the past. Gil’s segment could have easily been just as much of an InfoDump as Wrathia’s in chapter 3. (Thankfully a good amount of it wasn’t!)

  8. I think your view of animators is a bit peculiar. Granted yeah animation is technically more challenging form of art, but from storytelling point a lot of the same rules apply both on animation and comics. So animator doing a comic seems quite natural at least to me. I’d be more surprised if an animator would go and write a long book instead.

    That being said I more or less agree with your review. Art looks great, especially the color design which is sometimes mesmerizing, but the story is still bit of a mess.

  9. I like the characters a lot, their actions speak louder than words I would say (I’m reading into things). I think they will grow throughout the story and as a reader I like character growth. I’m very happy with it so far and I think the overall story is going to be an epic. That being said you have a “dies” when you ment “does”.

  10. I find myself still reading the comic only because me and my friend have long interesting discussions over just why every. single. character so far is either unlikeable, or doesn’t have much of a personality.

    Ava hasn’t really done anything to make me like her, save be a victim I guess? Standing up to Wrathia was a start so she might get there.

    Wrathia has the vocabulary and maturity of 13 year old with an attitude problem, instead of a planetary overload.

    Maggie is probably one of the most unlikeable characters in the webcomic, I really hope her attitude, or her ATTEMPTED MURDERS ain’t supposed to be seen as anything but representable. (the forum thinks overwise)

    Odin has the ‘mysterious character with mysterious motives’ mask on so it’s hard to say. (tho the random lolita characters quickly reveal he doesn’t know everything himself)

    And Gil feels like the cheap ‘nice’ character in a group of jerks, and whats worse, we were force fed his whole back-story the moment we met him!

    There’s a problem when it’s been ten chapters and I still don’t care if the characters live or die. Or if I want certain characters to actively get killed.

  11. In regards to Ava’s Demon, my major concern is the pacing. It’s a lovely story with characters who could be fleshed out if the story could pick up the pace. The artist often pauses on temporary hiatus, which while not a problem of itself (artists ARE people)- is problematic due to the waiting it takes to get through a short scene on top of it. A panel per page really slows things down and kills the anticipation, and with the dialogue downplayed for the art, it takes a lot of panels/weeks of two-day updates to understand what is going on, with the artist’s schedule as it is. As such, it removes the reader’s investment.

  12. The comic isn’t finished, but since I got a quite long glimpse of it, and I just love it. I would give it a 4.9, good story, beautiful art, but in the beginning i didn’t feel much for the characters, until later on, which to me was a bit late. But i just love it!

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